WOW! Mary, this part is awesome. When she begins to open up and tell the story of her father. When she is telling the story I am in awe. How can a man think his daughter will stay "pure" and not have her period? What a crazy cruel father! He called his daughter a whore and cut her hair?
Katie or Deidre did the right thing to defend herself and protect mother!
The awkward interaction between Freemont and her in the class observation was great!
The feeling is well described and I felt the rage... now things may get tricky. They both know something about each other and the confrontation needs to happen.
Do you ever feel like a counselor? I think with this subject of writing you may learn a lot of personal information over your students and they may ask for your opinion?
I think you seem very open minded so I can see student wanting to tell you more than you might want to know !
What!! Freemont in her apartment! Great twist :)
I never expected him INSIDE her apartment. I love the way you describe the slap. "you will suffer for that" makes me so scared for her.
I knew that student Todd was a part of this! Then the Aunt Eunice came to add more to the drama.
This is a such an intense scene and the dialogue is so good.
Freemont is a dirty old man! This was an unforgettable scene.
She has the upper hand now.
Thanks for all your comments -- they are really helpful.
ReplyDeleteYes, teaching writing is a bit like counseling -- at least the way I teach writing. And I do get to know a lot of secrets. I think that's why some teachers stick to the standard essay -- they don't want to know. I sometimes feel that way, but the therapy of writing is too important to ignore.