Fools Journey (pg 39-58)

Chapter V starts off with the cliff hanger of the previous chapter with the wreath embedded with Deidre's hair.

My thoughts now question who Panda really is. She is a very funny but odd character. She seems to have interest in black magic and things of this sort. She insists on having Deidre go stay with her and it makes me think she may have something up her sleeve. Maybe she is the person trying to put a spell on her?

Mrs. Ruiz is pretty interesting and I like how you use broken English for her. I'm also reading "The Help" and I would say you could maybe do a bit more of this type of language for her.

She's a Hispanic lady so maybe use more accent in her language?

The hair. I loved how you threw in so much detail to the history of what clipping of hair mean in the Victorian age and what it can generally signifies, "control".

I get uncomfortable and a creepy sensation by the way you describe Freemont Willard. The oil slick image when he talks and you did a great job making him a creepy man. The detail in how he pet her hair and what memories that brought her made my stomach churn thinking she was possible molested?

Love this story so far!